Analysis of a sequence from the rough cut that we have plans of changing because of feedback from our teacher -Production

We have decided to change this sequence because of the repetitiveness of the shots that was noted by our tutor. We will most likely be replacing this with a variety of close ups and other shots and reducing the number of cuts so it does not seem so disorientating.  

Below is the same sequence after we changed some of the shots. We used a wider variety of shots instead of just switching back and forth between only two. The wider variety makes the sequence less disorientating and more of a pleasure to watch especially when on a bigger screen.